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--- a/content/journal/encrypt-and-dither-photos-in-hugo/index.md
+++ b/content/journal/encrypt-and-dither-photos-in-hugo/index.md
@@ -1,16 +1,8 @@
 ---
 title: "Encrypt and Dither Photos in Hugo"
-date: 2024-02-05T09:47:45-05:00
+date: 2024-02-06T23:00:00-05:00
 draft: false
 references:
-- title: "Elliot Jay Stocks  | 2023 in review"
-  url: https://elliotjaystocks.com/blog/2023-in-review
-  date: 2024-02-02T15:51:48Z
-  file: elliotjaystocks-com-fcit8u.txt
-- title: "Encrypt and decrypt a file using SSH keys"
-  url: https://www.bjornjohansen.com/encrypt-file-using-ssh-key
-  date: 2024-02-05T14:50:24Z
-  file: www-bjornjohansen-com-hqud3x.txt
 - title: "Ditherpunk — The article I wish I had about monochrome image dithering — surma.dev"
   url: https://surma.dev/things/ditherpunk/
   date: 2024-02-05T14:50:25Z
@@ -19,6 +11,14 @@ references:
   url: https://solar.lowtechmagazine.com/about/the-solar-website/
   date: 2024-02-05T14:50:28Z
   file: solar-lowtechmagazine-com-vj7kk5.txt
+- title: "Elliot Jay Stocks  | 2023 in review"
+  url: https://elliotjaystocks.com/blog/2023-in-review
+  date: 2024-02-02T15:51:48Z
+  file: elliotjaystocks-com-fcit8u.txt
+- title: "Encrypt and decrypt a file using SSH keys"
+  url: https://www.bjornjohansen.com/encrypt-file-using-ssh-key
+  date: 2024-02-05T14:50:24Z
+  file: www-bjornjohansen-com-hqud3x.txt
 ---
 
 I encrypted all the photos on this site and wrote a tiny image server that decrypts and dithers the photos, then created a Hugo shortcode to display dithered images in posts. It keeps high-res photos of my kid off the web, and it looks cool.
@@ -30,39 +30,42 @@ I encrypted all the photos on this site and wrote a tiny image server that decry
 When I was first setting up this site, I considered giving all the photos a monochrome [dithered][1] treatment à la [Low-tech Magazine][2]. Hugo has impressive [image manipulation functionality][3] but doesn't include dithering and [seems unlikely to add it][4]. I opted for full-color photos and went on with my life.
 
 [1]: https://surma.dev/things/ditherpunk/
-[2]: https://solar.lowtechmagazine.com/
+[2]: https://solar.lowtechmagazine.com/about/the-solar-website/#dithered-images
 [3]: https://gohugo.io/content-management/image-processing/
 [4]: https://github.com/gohugoio/hugo/issues/8598
 
-Most of what I post on this site are these monthly [dispatches][5] that start with what my family's been up to in the last month and include several high-resolution photos. Last week, I was reading Elliot Jay Stocks' "[2023 in review][6]," and he's adament about not posting photos of his kids. That inspired me to take another crack at getting dithered images working -- I take a lot of joy out of documenting our family life, and low-res, dithered images seemed like a good balance between giant full-color photos and not showing people in photos at all. And to add another wrinkle: this site is [open source][7], so I also needed to ensure that the source images wouldn't be available on GitHub.
+Most of what I post on this site are these monthly [dispatches][5] that start with what my family's been up to in the last month and include several high-resolution photos. Last week, I was reading Elliot Jay Stocks' "[2023 in review][6]," and he's adament about not posting photos of his kids. That inspired me to take another crack at getting dithered images working -- I take a lot of joy out of documenting our family life, and low-res, dithered images strike a good balance between giant full-color photos and not showing people in photos at all. And to add another wrinkle: this site is [open source][7], so I also needed to ensure that the source images wouldn't be available on GitHub.
 
 [5]: /tags/dispatch/
 [6]: https://elliotjaystocks.com/blog/2023-in-review
 [7]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com
 
-I tried treating the full-size images with ImageMagick on the command line and then letting Hugo resize the result, but I wasn't happy with the output -- there's still way too much data in a dithered 3000x2000px image, so when you scale it down, it just looks like a crappy black-and-white photo. Furthermore, the encoding wasn't properly optimizing for two-color images and so the files were larger than I wanted.
+I tried treating the full-size images with ImageMagick on the command line and then letting Hugo resize the result, but I wasn't happy with the output -- there's still way too much data in a dithered full-sized image, so when you scale it down, it just looks like a crappy black-and-white photo. Furthermore, the encoding wasn't properly optimizing for two-color images and so the files were larger than I wanted.
 
-I needed to find some way to scale the images to the appropriate size and _then_ apply the dither.  Fortunately, Hugo has the ability to [fetch remote images][8], which got me thinking about a separate image processing service. After a late night of coding, I've got a solution I'm quite pleased with. Read on for more details.
+I needed to find some way to scale the images to the appropriate size and _then_ apply the dither.  Fortunately, Hugo has the ability to [fetch remote images][8], which got me thinking about a separate image processing service. After a late night of coding, I've got a solution I'm quite pleased with. Read on for more details, and if you want to follow along, you'll need to have Ruby installed (I recommend [asdf][9] if you're on a Unix-y OS) as well as ImageMagick and OpenSSL.
 
 [8]: https://gohugo.io/content-management/image-processing/#remote-resource
+[9]: https://asdf-vm.com/
 
 ### 1. Encrypt all images
 
-We'll use OpenSSL to encrypt our images. I used [this guide][9] to get started. First, generate a secret key (the `-hex` option gives us something we can paste into a GitHub secret later):
+We'll use OpenSSL to encrypt our images ([here's a guide][10]). First, we'll generate a secret key (the `-hex` option gives us something we can paste into a GitHub secret later):
 
-[9]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/7285c58add56e2ac6b5f7bf62914f0615ac23c9f/.github/workflows/deploy.yml
+[10]: https://www.bjornjohansen.com/encrypt-file-using-ssh-key
 
 ```sh
 openssl rand -hex -out secret.key 32
 ```
 
-Don't forget to `gitignore` the key:
+[Make a backup][11] of the key and then `gitignore` it:
+
+[11]: https://bitwarden.com/
 
 ```sh
 echo secret.key >> .gitignore
 ```
 
-Then use it to encrypt all the images in the `content` folder (I use an interactive Ruby shell for this sort of thing because I'm not very good at shell scripting):
+Then we'll use the key to encrypt all the images in the `content` folder. I use an interactive Ruby shell for this sort of thing because I'm not very good at shell scripting:
 
 ```ruby
 Dir.glob("content/**/*.{jpg,jpeg,png}").each do |path|
@@ -79,27 +82,30 @@ end
 
 ### 2. Build a tiny image server
 
-I wrote a [very simple image server][10] using [Sinatra][11] and [MiniMagick][12] that takes a path to an image and an optional geometry string and returns a dithered image. I won't paste the entire file here but it's really pretty short and simple.
+I wrote a [very simple image server][12] using [Sinatra][13] and [MiniMagick][14] that takes a path to an image and an optional geometry string and returns a dithered image. I won't paste the entire file here but it's really pretty short and simple.
 
-[10]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/bf5238dd56b6dfe9ee2f1d629d017b2075750663/bin/dither/dither.rb
-[11]: https://sinatrarb.com/
-[12]: https://github.com/minimagick/minimagick
+[12]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/bf5238dd56b6dfe9ee2f1d629d017b2075750663/bin/dither/dither.rb
+[13]: https://sinatrarb.com/
+[14]: https://github.com/minimagick/minimagick
+
+If you want to run it yourself, copy down everything in the [`bin/dither`][15] folder and then run the following:
+
+[15]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/tree/bf5238dd56b6dfe9ee2f1d629d017b2075750663/bin/dither
 
-Run it like this:
 
 ```sh
-cd bin/dither && \
-  bundle install && \
-  ROOT=[SITE_ROOT]/content \
-  KEY=[SITE_ROOT]/secret.key \
+> cd bin/dither
+> bundle install
+> ROOT=../../content \
+  KEY=../../secret.key \
   bundle exec ruby dither.rb
-````
+```
 
-Then you should be able to visit <http://localhost:4567/path/to/file.jpg?geo=400x300> in your browser (assuming you have an encrypted image at `content/path/to/file.jpg.enc`) to see it working.
+Then, assuming you have an encrypted image at `content/path/to/file.jpg.enc`, you should be able to visit [localhost:4567/path/to/file.jpg?geo=400x300](http://localhost:4567/path/to/file.jpg?geo=400x300) in your browser to see it working.
 
 ### 3. Create a Hugo shortcode to fetch dithered images
 
-We need to tell Hugo where to find our dither server. Give Hugo access to the `DITHER_SERVER` environment variable in `config.toml`:
+We need to tell Hugo where to find our image server, which we'll supply with an environment variable. First, we'll give Hugo access to `DITHER_SERVER` in `config.toml`:
 
 ```toml
 [security]
@@ -113,7 +119,7 @@ Then start Hugo like this:
 DITHER_SERVER=http://localhost:4567 hugo server
 ```
 
-Now we'll create the shortcode ([`layouts/shortcodes/dither.html`][13]):
+Now we'll create the shortcode ([`layouts/shortcodes/dither.html`][16]):
 
 ```html
 {{ $file := printf "%s%s" .Page.File.Dir (.Get 0) }}
@@ -141,7 +147,7 @@ Adjust for your needs, but the gist is:
 2. Use `resources.GetRemote` to fetch the image
 3. Display as appropriate
 
-[13]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/2cda4b8f4e98bb9df84747da283d13075aac4d41/themes/v2/layouts/shortcodes/dither.html
+[16]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/2cda4b8f4e98bb9df84747da283d13075aac4d41/themes/v2/layouts/shortcodes/dither.html
 
 Use it like this:
 
@@ -151,7 +157,7 @@ Use it like this:
 
 ### 4. Delete the unencrypted images from the repository
 
-Now that everything's working, let's remove all the uncrypted images from the repository. It's not enough to just `git rm` them, since they'd still be present in the git history, so we'll use [`git filter-repo`][14] to rewrite the history as if they never existed.
+Now that everything's working, let's remove all the uncrypted images from the repository. It's not enough to just `git rm` them, since they'd still be present in the history, so we'll use [`git filter-repo`][17] to rewrite the history as if they never existed.
 
 ```ruby
 Dir.glob("content/**/*.{jpg,jpeg,png}") do |path|
@@ -159,11 +165,11 @@ Dir.glob("content/**/*.{jpg,jpeg,png}") do |path|
 end
 ```
 
-[14]: https://github.com/newren/git-filter-repo
+[17]: https://github.com/newren/git-filter-repo
 
 ### 5. Tweak site styles
 
-The resulting images will be entirely black and white. If your site, like mine, doesn't use a perfectly white background, you can improve the display of the dithered images by setting `mix-blend-mode` to `multiply`:
+The resulting images will be entirely black and white, and this site doesn't use a pure white background color. We can improve the display of the dithered images with some CSS that sets `mix-blend-mode` to `multiply`:
 
 ```css
 img {
@@ -171,7 +177,7 @@ img {
 }
 ```
 
-The blacks will still show as black, but the whites will now be the background color of your site.
+The blacks will still show as black, but the whites will now be the background color of the site.
 
 ### 6. Update the deploy workflow
 
@@ -182,12 +188,14 @@ This site uses GitHub Actions to deploy on pushes to the `main` branch, and we n
   * Install Ruby and the required Gem dependencies
   * Write the secret key to a file
   * Start the dither server as a background task (i.e. with `&`)
-* Add the `DITHER_SERVER` environment variable so that Hugo knows where to find it
+* Add the `DITHER_SERVER` environment variable to the build step so that Hugo knows where to find it
 
-[Here's the deploy workflow for this site][15] for reference.
+[Here's the deploy workflow for this site][18] for reference.
 
-[15]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/7285c58add56e2ac6b5f7bf62914f0615ac23c9f/.github/workflows/deploy.yml
+[18]: https://github.com/dce/davideisinger.com/blob/7285c58add56e2ac6b5f7bf62914f0615ac23c9f/.github/workflows/deploy.yml
 
 ***
 
-I'm 41 years old, and this stuff still gives me a buzz like it did when I was 14.
+This was super fun to build, and I'm really happy with [the result][19]. It makes the local authoring and deploy processes a bit more complicated since we have to run the separate image server, but I think the result is worth it. Hope you found this interesting, and please [reach out](mailto:hello@davideisinger.com) if you have any thoughts or questions.
+
+[19]: /journal/dispatch-12-february-2024/